Maius Intra Qua Extra

Thanks! I hadn't thought of it that way, that the conflict was brought much closer to home and more personal. The reveal is a lot more subtle - Ben, Amy, and Markus start to realize that something is wrong with David, but they don't know what, and they get more agitated as they see him do more more-than-human things.

I definitely didn't change Markus' reaction to the whole situation, since that's really the focus of the story: how the three friends react, compared to each others reactions and Will's reaction in Neighbours, and how it all changes David's life. While I didn't change much in the next chapter, I think Markus comes off as even more unreasonable and panicky (and xenophobic), because instead of objecting to the very real danger of David's powers in the first story, he's now objecting mostly to just the fact he's an alien, and supporting his fears by magnifying David's perceived threat in his imagination (which is a common human reaction).